Rie Sheridan Rose
Something to think about...I had someone tell me in a workshop to try and avoid weak words at the ends of lines. You might think about moving the "fors" to the beginning of the lines beneath them, because "words" and "meant" are much stronger words... Still, a nice piece. :)
Rie Sheridan Rose I am going to have to look into the form of the tritina so that I can grasp all the nuances. Compelling imagery.
Tritina: salvation
Rie Sheridan Rose Thanks, Alan
Two Birds
Rie Sheridan Rose Something to think about...I had someone tell me in a workshop to try and avoid weak words at the ends of lines. You might think about moving the "fors" to the beginning of the lines beneath them, because "words" and "meant" are much stronger words... Still, a nice piece. :)
To Kill A Deer and Something More
Rie Sheridan Rose Some powerful word choices.
To Kill A Deer and Something More
Rie Sheridan Rose Thanks! I went to a poetry festival last weekend, and this was one of the results.
Two Birds
Rie Sheridan Rose I like the soundscape of it. :)
Happen